It was very good, the only thing I can think of that bothered me was you left out all apostrophes.
Other than that I liked it!

Rachel

W0w, i really like it. great j0b. thanx f0r c0mmenting 0n my p0em. x0ox

This is a really good poem!!!
you did an awesome job
5/5
---jess

This is really good!!

Wow! I love it! It sounds alot like me:(