Wow. Incredible. You are talented. You know that? This is such an Excellent poem. "I took the risk" Showing your emotions. and made interpretation made easy. Heart giving up but still trying. Beautiful. I voted 5/5.

Wow! this is great. i love it!!! good job!

Ya know, it was so.. i don't know. Familiar I guess. Not just because so many people write the same thing, but I think you actually had feeling in it. I don't know.

It was good, i just felt it could've had more emotion to it, just a little more... it was sort of brief for the topic, it wasn't as deep as i thought it would be... good job still though

I love the rhyming in this, and the flow was perfect.

"so this is my goodbye.. one thats long over due" -- 'overdue' is all one word. Remember to always capitalise your 'I's and use punctuation when writing 'I've' etc - (note the apostrophe).

Aww. A great poem filled with emotions and so much feelings. 5/5

This is a nice heartfelt poem. I have one suggestion for thepurpose of flow. In the line:
But apparently theres something I must have missed
(Eliminate must have)
Great job!5/5

[What has happened and who i've become]
Suggestion: What happened; who have I become?

[It's too late now, i've got to live on
I've got to show some confidence, i've got to move on]
Suggestion: Try changing the rhymes of 'on' and 'on.' It's not really rhyming. =P

Ok, the poem. I gave you a 4/5 for very many reasons. I really liked the topic of the poem, although it's cliche. You handled a cliche topic in a suitable manner.

I didn't much like the set up of the poem itself. I like my stanzas to be neat and spaced out so it's easier to read if you're doing rhyming couplets.

The rhymes were cliche. They were easy to rhyme with and that they were easy enough to think of off the top of your head. The best rhymes are the ones that you really have to think about.

The flow was not really all that well done. It went from a short line, to a longer line and then a shorter one. It was all over the place. I personally felt it was very sloppy with the set up.

Please don't think I'm criticising you too harshly. I did like the poem to some extent, but it could use some work. But nobody's perfect. =) Keep it up. 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

Oh wow, I can definitely relate to this.
I thought the flow was a little off in some places, but apart from that you did a wonderful job.

My fave line was
No one to turn to..i'm lost within me
i can relate to this poem fully
chin up

much love and many kisses,
bex

I can really relate to this poem right now.... its hard. i loved the way you made this poem stand out from the rest of the poems that go along with the same subject. it was really easy to follow but at the same time was depth....dont stop writing :)

Wow that was really good keep it up im adding that to my favorites
~danielle~

A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG!

Great job 5/5