Hey i liked this!!
keep writing!!
5/5

Ohhh, I like it! =D

5/5

But somewhere out
above the blackness
our Hero sheds a tear.

that the fav part of your poem =) it reminds me of myself when i was looking for a gf

but u might use some easier words, like instead of blackness: use Darkness
simple poems are usually good =)

keep up the good work tho

I disagree.

I really love the vibe of the poem, and the style of the words go very hand and hand with the imagery created. tells a lovely tale filled with emotion in such a small amount of writing. write some more, this style is a nice relief to what i am acustom to reading.