Wow, so well written.

The one line i think doesn't quite fit in is:
'as i lie in dormant'. I have to say i don't think that works but excluding that line i think it works well, with an unforced rhyme and a nice flow to it.

Ahhhhhhhh. This is so so sad. The sadness pours out in the words you write. Excellent job! Take Care Cindy

I have to agree with ^^ that line doesn't quite fit in. it was amazingly written thought, nicely penned. 5/5