Hey great work i can think you could still go into more detail like
i take this toothbrush,
in deep i shall reach,
the upbring of,
all my rules i breach.

im not the best wrighter thou lol just that the toothbrush sounds like an added object atm and its not told what it has to do with the story... but great work keep it up =]

I really like this poem, my friend went through that, she was like attached to that toothbrush, and that's what ur poem reminded me of... but i still love it, i think it's amazing!
5/5!

*Shawte*

Awe, this is sad but you did a good job.

I like the ending i think it finishes it of well some areas could do with improving mayb a little more detale as mildura said but good job. 4/5.

Sad indeed! As a young lady living in a superficial society, I know exactly what this poem is trying to say. I especially liked the last stanza:

"I need to feel pretty
I need to feel thin
I need to run away from the world that I'm in..."

I hate how people always prefer thin over, well, over-weight. Being both, extremely thin and too over-weight is completely unhealthy...
Haha! Well, this should be about your poem not my rants and raves. I liked it! Well done!
5/5

I've been sitting here for about three minutes now, trying to come up with something to say, but I can't. I can't say anything without sounding completely retarded, or telling you about the shit society's making you go through, or saying that I sympathize. Because I can say all I want that I feel your pain, bud. But the truth is, I think you're better at it than me.

Very nice, i didn't get the whole toothbrush thing, but i'm guessing it's just how it all goes, sry. great poem though, nice job 5/5

A very deep and great message gave out, wonderful writing.5/5

Hey hey is this robert who talks to meee (leanne) ?