Comments : The Performance

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Really great,essential,well done 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Wow! I really loved how you described the sound, although they were words, I could hear it! This was very nicely done, and I can definitely relate to this because I have performed, in a band, and I have also performed as a solo piano player. You set the mood really well, and everything was perfect. Good job on this one!

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I liked the subject of playing music to a live audience, the way you described that they even had their eyes closed showed they were enjoying it.
    I see you tried to stay away from the overused rhyming words, however in places it did seem a little forced to me.
    Rhymes always come across forced if they read unusual to the natural spoken way; if words have been swapped around to rhyme.
    I didn't like the use of "nice" in the second stanza, it seems quite boring.
    In conclusion, I liked the subject idea, I just feel more thought should have gone into the word choice.

  • 15 years ago

    by Brad Quammen

    Once again,VERY good poem.As always you seem to make each word flow to the next keeping you in-transe as the story unfolds in the mind