Comments : Now It Is Coming Clear

  • 17 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Good to see you writing again!
    couple errors:
    I've gone out of my to show I care

    ^ did you mean gone out of your way?

    And I'm much better of without
    ^ you forgot an f in of

    Other than that I LOVED THIS POEM! You have an excellent starting stanza ....it told exactly what was going on in this poem..as if it were a story you told the characters, the setting, and what was going on...I love stories/ AND poems that do that!
    Great write with this one hun!
    Chelsey

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Good job on your poem. The longing for your love really comes through.