Needs work.

DiiS iiZ SUCH A GO0D POEM...ITZ LYK S0 SAD... NiiCE W0RK...aCTUALLii...EXCELLENT JOB!!...

Good going girl :)

This is a great poem. I didnt find anything wrong with it but I'm just starting out. I hope you the best!

If it jumps around its ok it goes together i liked it alot great job

I think it's a good poem! =] One of the first really long poems that I really all the way ;] Keep it up!

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Hey Steph this was a great poem girl you know this was one of the best poems you have wrote... i had the chills the entire time reading it from the begining to the end... i give you a 5/5

Your Sis Lizzy

That poem really touched my heart as i was reading it

Wow great poem! it was really long and usually i stop like half way in the long poems b/c i loose intrest but you kept me reading to the end! you did an amazing job really 5/5 <33