Good job .. i feel as if i can relate to what you want to get out and about this girl who is just withering away

Big,
never use big.
never sue any descriptive word that is 3 or 4 letters9good bad sad glad big(or small) etc)

theyre EVIL(evil works)
lol.
but this again was a really good poem. but i didnt really like ti as much as the others. idk why..
xx333Lauren

Awwwh I loved this, I thought it was very well written.
I enjoyed the imagery and I thought it flowed very well.