Nice poem. you can really be drawn in to the poem. However, i would say that the strict rhyming didnt work in a couple of lines. But it does work overall, Good poem.

I ALWAYS LOVE THE LAST STANZA! :) Keep it up, b/c you'll only improve!
^^LOL! We laughed about ppl saying that the other day!

Wow. pretty powerful if u ask me man. :) I have nothing to add. you've written two poems and they're both a hundred times better then my first poems ha!

only thing id say now is to start experimenting :D try different rhyming schemes :) example

the kitten pounced
the ball then bounced
running away
from where it just lay.

lol terrible poem! but u get wat i mean? There are endless possibilities babe!!! good luck and keep writing! ur doing AWESOME :D

love ruthie