I bet my mum will love this!
I dunno why you don't like it, I think it is really cute!

Beautiful and heartfelt, really good job!

This was very beautiful, and I'm sure you put a lot of heart & emotion in to it.. It really shows. I bet Donna will love this. It flowed really well.. and showed just how much you care! Awesome job. A few things though..

Throughout he years [the]

Still you let me know your there [instead of 'your' it should be 'you're' as in you are.]

I know your there to turn to [again, it should be you're]

Your a remarkable person [and again , you're]

Always doing whats best [what's]

Sorry.. Lol. Idk why. I'm kinda big on spelling. I always catch them, and they bother me.. I know everyone does it, so do I. But, I like it when people point it out to me, so I can learn.. & i do it as well. Soo.. I hope I didn't offend you in any way. It's just something I've always done.. Lol. But, those were very small.. and it didn't really effect your poem. I loved it.. Like I said, it was very beautiful. Great job. Keep it up, Hun.

Bri.x