That's a lovely piece! I'm glad you appreciate your bond between you and your sister. I wish I had a sister =(. Anyway, I thought the structure was interesting and nice choice of words. Very good job!
5/5

Ur making me want a sister, so i can write all this about her!! anyway, this is great, i read the whole thing!!(i have a short attention span) i love the way you write! 5/5!

*Shawte*