WOWY that was crazyness 5/5

Hmm. its okay. I mean... part of me is screaming make it longer... but.. the other sides like... you shouldn't drag it on if you have nothing more to say...

Sorry, but this just looks hurried and halfhearted. "Her stare will cut you like a razor blade" is just too good a line to be set amongst 10 lines of dismal prose. I'm sorry if this seems harsh, but as Confused Child says, it could do with being longer, and better structured I say. Without dragging it out, I agree.

Great poem!!