Awwwwwwwwwww!! oh my goodness!! this is sooooo sad...there were tears in my eyes as i read this...im serious!... really good poem!

Omg!!!! this also brought tears to my eyes..it is so sad! i really liked it!

You need to fix up the mistakes, like take out all the ' so that the thatâ?? don't come into the poem, cause its a bit hard to read, well it affects the flow. but i still loved it. a story but a perfect story.

5/5 David

So sweety i am sorry for your loss but a woonderful writen piece

Wow, this was absolutely sad. It's a great and sad short story. If this happened to you, I'm sorry for your loss. Great "short story." 5/5

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Ohh this is so sad. Its such a good piece! I dont understand some of it because of the apostrophes though, but all in all amazing.