"sailingggg awayy." Teria the added letters to me made is seem like sarcasm. To me.. Yeh..

Hummm "her heart thats fake." I personily didn't think that worked out well that line...

But other then those, that poem was probly the best I've read all day...

VERY CREATIVE!!.. good flow and interesting rhyme sceheme great write

I loved how you repeated 'sailing awaaay' I thought that was creative and made it stand out.
I liked the imagery in this and the wording was breathtaking.
Excellent work