I thought that was real sad! I like the imagery and the structure. I thought this poem was well done! 5/5

Kool sis!!!

Wow, that was very sad and gripping write. Lots of emotion, great job.

Wow very epic. I like it.

Well written! It's very powerful. Definitely stirred up my emotions. 5/5

Its really well written!!!

Its really well written!!!

Loved your choice of words! Lovely read, great write, amazing poem. Keep it up ^_^

Loved your choice of words! Lovely read, great write, amazing poem. Keep it up ^_^

Loved your choice of words! Lovely read, great write, amazing poem. Keep it up ^_^

Wow really good poem! love the endin!

I really like it. You used a lot of graphic imagery to display the dark situation, and the second stanza did a really good job of pulling together the horror and pain of the event.
I especially loved the line,
"My skin ashen and cold"
I think it described the girl's situation and feelings during the event really while also providing a poetic impact to the piece.

Overall Good job. I enjoyed it

Omg, this was amazing. I really the feelings in it. It had wonderful phrasing, and collection of words.
Great work! :D

Thank you so much ^^