This is a great poem. It reminds me about how I felt a long time ago about someone. Great job, and maybe you could return the favor? lol.. Keep up the good work.

This is a great piece. Simple, and yet complex. It has appeal to emotion, and yet is not drenched in heart wrenching sadness. I tend to prefer shorter works as well. :) The only thing I would suggest is improving the cadence a little bit, but in this piece it isn't a big deal. It almost makes the piece better [more interesting]. One thing that is really great, as well, is that this piece rhymes really easily. The rhyme scheme is not forced. I particularly liked these lines:

"Away you went,
you left her to fall.
Now all she feels,
is nothing at all."

Overall a very nice piece of work. Thank you so much for your comment on my poem, it really means a lot to me to get the comments. *Athame

Hey thank you for you comment i thought that i would repay the favor... this poem is really great i like the way you seemed to get how a part of me feels right now, you see my fionce just cheated on me and i am really upset/pisses and oh my all of almost any emotion you could imagine, but this poem is beautiful and i really liked reading it... you have a wonderful way with words!
**LostButterfly**

Hey em luv the poem it was really good :) i enjoyed reading it as much as i enjoy the others good work keep it up

Simple words portray the deepest feelings. My earlier work is very similar to this as i found saying what you want to say with no fuss and wrapping, gets the point across nicely, creating an uncluttered poem.
You've mastered it well =)
5/5
*Gem*

Thats great..I love it..thanks for your comment

Its really great... are you really a broken hearted?? well if thats how you write its too great by hte way im raina

Its really great... are you really a broken hearted?? well if thats how you write its too great by hte way im raina

Thats a bad feeling, ive felt that way before. hope everything is okay, great poem! deppressing but good, =]

Diana
xoxo

Hey, this is a really awesome poem! Nicely done, its so hard to write short poems like this and get so much emotion in it like you have done. keep up the awesome work:D

Great job!
She's all alone again
wiping the tears from her eyes
Feeling empty inside
nobody's there to hear her cries

This says it all. I can feel this pain. Take Care Cindy

This is great i know the feeling, not a very good feeling, you seem to know exactly what i'm feeling so......... anyway keep up the great work & plz feel free tocomment on my poems, thanx

"She's all alone again
wiping the tears from her eyes
Feeling empty inside
nobody's there to hear her cries"

^Very beautiful, indeed. It struck a chord in my heart and I could tell that you wrote it from yours. The flow and diction was very nicely used. Beautifully written. Keep it up!

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah :)