A heart wrenching, emotional write that while it isn't horribly long carries a great depth to it. Simple, and yet complex it catches the attention of the reader, drawing the eye on down the page. Wonderful job on this piece. Best wishes, and blessed be. *5/5 - Athame

This is a great poem which is written so sadly, very emotional. you have succeded to write this wonderful poem and prove that you are a great writer, you are amazing, keep up the great work. a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

I can feel the emotion running through your words. So unfortunate that this has happend.
Keep up the great writing!

Cheers!

Shirlz
xx

I think you could drop the last line in verse two. I feel it's like adding sugar to a chocolate-bar, know what I mean?

Anyways, it was an emotional write and full of real feelings. Hope everything's okay.

Keep it up.

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

This was a very good poem in my opion, it was deep and painted a nice little picture. It actually reminded me of a Family Guy skit with death, but that's besides the point. 5/5

This is amazing!! there's so muc emotion. i'm so sorry that your friend did that, but i think it's good that you could turn your emotions into this!! great job!

Forever*Yours

It's beautiful!
just that your friend has someone's shoulder to cry on is the best...on top of that you wrote her a poem (which is very good) so she must be feeling better already...

That is very sad. I'm sorry for your lost. I had a grandmother who commited suicide. It wasn't easy at all. This poem was better than the other. Wel Thank you for the coment!
God Bless 5/5
<3Tay