Hey this was really good. i loved the words u used to write it. wonderfull job!! thank u so much for the comment on my poem. meant heaps!!

A beautiful, touching, and heartfelt write. I loved the descriptions, the language and the flow. I must say though this stanza honestly took away my breath

I look into your eyes
See the scarlet streaks
Of liquid sorrow
Rushing down your cheeks

I loved it. Absolutely loved it. Great job. *5/5

I loved the last stanza, along with the first. This poem wasn't your best, the emotions seemed a bit forced or dull like. You did a good job, still though. But, the poem did go from ... past tense, to present tense, to future tense.. all within a few verses. Which, kinda threw me off a bit. You talked about how she felt, then how you helped.. as if it were just in minutes this all happened, and I'm sure it was over a period of time.

You did a decent job though. 4/5

Keep it up, hun. <3 teria.