I think this poem would even better if you cut away the lines that below "Can you do it?" It leaves the reader with a question to think over!

Otherwise, nice flow, not the most spectacular choice of words but the simplicity and build-up of the poem makes up for it.

Keep up the good work.

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

(Imagine this in a beavis n' butthead voice) Whoooaaaa. Deeeep stuff man. keep it coming, i totally feel your pain. Uuuhh huh huh huh.
Duuude.

This is a pretty good poem can do for a bit more feeling but its still good, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

This is how i feel some days.

i like the words you used. they really made an impact on how this poem turned out. it was very effective. i loved it! excellent. 5/5

David

I think this was a good poem but maybe you should try to put a little bit more feeling into it....overall though i think its good.

Wow so intense, I have this feeling every time I wake up. But sometimes you just have to hold your breath and belive that tomorrow will be better, and if its not well all you have to do is realise that the bad thing(s) that happened yesterday are over and done with. Very interesting topic to write about, I am very glad you did because I dont see very unique toppics like this one very often. Nice work.

Yup i really can relate to this as this is what i feel most days of my boring life we need excitment fun dont we :d

xxx alex xxx

Lol...i can soo relate...siple words used..but it had a great effect on the emotion n truth portrayed in this wrk!...Good job!
kp it up!
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