Wow, your vocabulary is what amazes me most. I love it! It's full of wonderous emotion. But honestly, looking at them it kinda overwhealmed me. The length down the page, as well as length of your lines is enough to keep many from reading it. I noticed that people don't read mine if they are long as well. I suggest breaking down the lines, they are extremely long. My favorite line happened to be

"I don't even know if what I carry is truly what I think I hold"

That line is awesome. The thing I didn't like was how it didn't flow ery well, or have much rhythm. I was often thrown off. Though your vocabulary is good, I think you overuse some of it. It's kinda like trying to read shakespear for the first time (for most people, there are ecceptions) You have to think about it really hard to get something out of it at the first read. But in all I found it enjoyable .I noticed in the forum you were wondering why people woulndt comment. So I decided to answer.

peace

skittz

This is a bit confuzing, the long sentences lead the reader into a thought then rip them away at the next. Perhaps that was the point.

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