There can be more detail added at the end. but no need. it might wreck this poem. i loved it just the way it is. i might be the only one that does but i thought this was trully fantastic. in its own sad and succidal way at the end.

5/5 David

Hey nice poem...though it could hv been a tiny bit better if it ws descriptive 2wrds the end...but it's better off well like this...it's amazingly penned...just powerful in it's own manner....wonderful!kp up de good wrk!
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