Whoa. very cool poem. maybe you could read one of mine

This was very deep and greatly written i loved it, keep up =)

There's not much more I can say to you that I haven't already said, but I'll say it all again. this poem had good wording, a nice flow and great rhymes. I cant quite put my finger on a favorite stanza but I do have a lot of prefered lines:

'Self-loathing and hate encrusted'
'Just another fallen angel in a fallen city'
'The human race was doomed to fall'
'We speak of things unknown, untrue,
They speak of me, they speak of you'
'The coin was never ours to toss'

Although, there were a few lines that were a little longer than what the poem may have demanded. Anyway, once again I'm sorry for the negatives, but I would want the same from you...after all, how else I'm I meant to get better.

Brad

Really good..truly..(Abandoned by those once trusted,
Self-loathing and hate encrusted,) nice rhyming...

Oh man, that took my breath away. It was so packed with emotion and hate and darkness. I can see it all! Wonderful imagery as always. Keep it up!

Topic is amazing and poem is more than POWERFUL. Second stanza is great but this one is even more better:-We speak of things unknown, untrue,
They speak of me, they speak of you,
So curse this world, let's curse the lies,
Set the bomb and say goodbyes,-
Well done, 5/5

That was great work ^^ heck wish I could wrtie something like that haha ^^ but anyways that was asomeness! ><

5/5

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