OMG!! Awsome poem! My best friend is doing the same thing for a guy and I see her changing into something she is not and it really suxx... I just want her to be to her normal self... Anywas, great poem, continue the nice job.. Could you comment my poems too>? Thx.xxo
Haha so true lol I used to be that way in high school, dress up nice and gel the hair lol when really I should have just let everybody like me for me and nothing else. Excellent job once again 5/5 GG23 p.s. Ya'LLL did a great job on this one here
There were a couple of lines that possibly could do with a few more syllables in them.. They were just slightly shorter than either the prceding line or the one following it. Example of this
"you look cool,
and try to pretend that you really don't like school"
Well, for the first thing I love the title. Grabs you by the scruff of the neck and forces you to read this poem. Really powerful title - nicely chosen.
I simply adore the story being told here .. you are/were not in this boat alone. This is synonymous with most teenagers (and some adults). We ridicule others for dressing their best to impress; then go ahead and do it ourselves.
Apart from a couple of out of place lines, the flow of this was brilliant. It flows almost like a song. Very nice work indeed.
By the time you have finished reading this piece, you don't want to grab your glad-rags to go out in. Just slap on some sweats, and be real!
Very impressive piece, it's a poem that isn't just impressive to read .. but contains within the text, a valid message about life today.