Comments : Together

  • 17 years ago

    by Stacey

    I don't know if this poem is what is really happening to you but if any guy treats you like that and ignores you around others, he's not good enough for you. forget about him and find someone that will want to show you off to the world!
    good poem though

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Once again its more of a short story then a poem. its like your trying to tell a tale with no definitate flow or rhym pattern and dont get me wrong all poems dont have to rhym but since your new at this id suggest rhyming poems first and once you get into the "jist" of rhyming poems makeing something that doesnt rhym sound poetic is much easier.

  • 17 years ago

    by Untamed

    Cute poem