This is exactly how i feel. as i was reading this, it reminded me of me so much.. it scary. i lvoe how u wrote this tho. u have alot of talent. so much emotion was put into this poem and it shows. great job.. keep it up
take care
luve angie

Oh wow. That's great Lauren! Far out... Brilliant, seriously

I like the technique you used to repeat the very first line in every stanza (I forget what its called though . . .). Also, the "You know it's bad when" is sort of a pun in and of itself, which just gives more character to the poem.

Brilliantly done.

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That last stanza was so powerful and I admire that,

You know things are bad
When you rely on a blade,
When the everflowing blood
Makes your life start to fade.
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This piece I read over and over again it drew so much attention. 'when you rely on a blade'
I love that line. This is the best poem I've read from you so far....Besides the 'I'm sorry mum' Poem. xx

Omg that was an amazing read... and its something alot of people on this site can relate 2 ...great job!! if i could have gave it more then 5 i would have