I cant wait till the next one

This is good 4/5 i really like at the end how he's gonna repay her... nicely done
-Marina.

Same wow!

It was a good prose but do people actually say 'baby girl'? O_o

My gosh do you do that, Wow!

Hmm i probly should say but who knew writing could get you going so well? please write more! i want to know what happens next....