"she and not a few"...that it a bit random....
"So she went running in circles, and she laid her soul bare
She above all, thought to give love, to him who seemed to need care"....
What?...that's a bit weird third paragraph is really good,
fith paragraph doesnt fit, a bit mixed in meaning, random..
6th random.....
7th good,
last 2 paragaphs...wtf, it has nothing to do with the beginning paragraph but it matches ur tittle still...but mmmm idk, i think it needs looking over too..
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