Ooh my gosh, that was so good, it made me cry.

Wow very ghastly and very deep. it was great! thanx for your comment, it really ment a lot to me! 5/5!

That is soo good! love the way you put the words... umm... love this part...

"Voices run through her mind like a hail storm
They pound through her thoughts and she cries
The voice of a best friend says “I’ll always be here”
And the words “no matter what” drift to a memory
The bright blue eyes which once said “forever” are empty"

it really describes what she was feeling andd thinking...
this was a very sad and heart felt poem! it felt some how real! keep it up!

thanks for the comment on my poem! means alot to me!

Wow. i'm speechless. 5/5

Whoa this poem was very descriptive. i loved it. it painted a perfect picture, it felt as if i was in the poem.

5/5 david

Wow.. another really spectacular one.. i like this one more than the other poem i just read... i love how it doesnt rhyme so your words dont get lost in the rhymes.. and you describe everything so well... from the broken frost on the window to how she feels inside... you make it really easy for a reader to really live your poem as they read it.... i especially loved this line "She’s trapped on this bus so she can be trapped in a school
And the school traps her in a church where she doesn’t belong" i dont know why... the only thing i dont like is how she kills herself in the end... that really ruined this for me.. its too cliche ... just not the direction i wouldve made this poem... but other than that i really did love it

Great use of symbolism and imagery. its beautiful, thanks for the comment. keep up the great work, I love your style of writing.

Great use of symbolism and imagery. its beautiful, thanks for the comment. keep up the great work, I love your style of writing.

Another great poem.it almost made me cry.great job.

Very deep, very expressive poem. i love your word choice. So descriptive too.

A place when she will forever pay for the sins of her past

My fave line ^^

keep up the good work!

HOLY S*** is all i can say. That beats the crap out of every one of my stories and poems!!! WOW
sorry if me saying holy s*** offended u
ne ways amazing job!!!!
100,000,000,000/100,000,000,000