''When no one's watching inthe middle of the night.''

* In the* I think you meant. =P

This is another favourite of mine, my favourite part was the last stanza, particularly the first line of it, it really stood out to me.

Hmm, it was interesting, but not in a expanding mind sort of way, but more of a creative way. I liked how unpredictable some of the lines where. Awesome job :)

Very interesting poem.. an enjoyable read.. great job!

This was really interesting, but i enjoyed reading it, and letting it surprise me.
thx for the comments on my poems, and i will keep posting, cause comments are really important to how i write. (thx for the constructive criticism)
i will read more!
luv gabriella

It can be a great lyric if you find a good rhytm,so fine 5/5

When no one's watching inthe middle of the night.

^^ I think inthe is suppose to have a space between it.

Again i really didn't get the emotion from this or get what you were trying to say. The flow was really good tho.

Once again, could be lyrics
i don't really get it, but i think it has a deeper meaning to it, than just those words...

This was really great! It flowed wonderfully. You are amazing at writing these types of poetry. It was very creative & unique. I deffinitley have not read anything like it.

Which is always good :]

Bang, bang, liar, you're dead;
^^ Ahahaha. I loveeeee this line. Seriously. It makes me laugh.. but it's so.. POWERFUL. haha.

Amazing.

Bri x