Comments : Let This Light

  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Aw. That was sweet! It was very beautifully penned & flowed really well. Nothing seem forced, at all. It had a lot of passion & emotion in it. & wonderful imagery.

    One thing:
    In the fields lies

    ^ This line kind of threw me off, I think it should be 'In the field lies' or.. 'In the feilds lie.'

    Just my opinion though. It just threw me off, like I said. I had to go back & re-read it a couple times.

    But other than that, I think this was very beautiful.

    Amazing. Keep it up.

    Bri.x

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    That ending...wow!
    I absolutely loved it, it was so frikken amazing.
    The imagery you used in this blew me away, and I thought the flow was flawless.
    You did a great job with this.

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    *AWww that is wonderful and beautiful! Keep up the awesome work. Mostly I wouldn't read peomes without any stanza's becuase usually they're all over the place but I love you just kept it all together and organized it. The flow was wonderful! God bless 5/5
    <3Tayyy

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    Very cute poem. when i read this poem i sensed so much feelings in it. long time i havent read a love poem and this is just wonderful.

    The mind wonders endlessly
    Upon this question love
    Close your eyes to find me
    Follow the stars above

    i loved these four lines the most. 5/5 keep up the good work.