It's good. very sad though, but it paints quite the visual and I really liked it. I know it reminds me of something, but I can't think of what. It's very well done and you have good reason to be proud of it!
Charisma*

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Jebus... you're right, that is a dark poem..
And such a heart breaking one..
And to think things like this actually happen.
But wow Midnight, you have a right to be proud of this, it's bloody amazing, lol
5/5
*Gem*

Wow. awesome poem. I like the third stanza the best- wonderful contrast between the smooth water caressing her soul and then the forceful current tousling her hair. really good! 5/5. just wish it were longer

I quite enjoyed htis peace. You instantly used an alliteration with; "dark depths". Them you go on to describe the water as silent. This makes the reader enjaged in the poem as when something is silent the human mind instantly expects something to suddenly happen. Andthis gives the reader the chills, whats going to happen they wonder? The secound stanza you tell us about how this girl went missing, this kinda makes the readrer sad for this girl. It makes the reader wnat to know what happened. And we want to know what role this river plays in this girls dissapearence. This line; "Her soul lies washed" youve kinda hinted about the river. You bought that part back. Your entire poem youve got this river hinted. You make it sound like the river has beccame her or osmething. An intresting read. Keep it up! xx

:o gruesome tale 8)
nevertheless was good

That was a great poem good flow, its really dark and sad

..thank you for your comment too..
..i like this one,
..i used to like sad mood,.
..hehe,=)

I would be proud of that poem too...it was great! i mean the story was pretty sad but most poems are sad...and i like the idea that these people walk by so often and "into the water thier tears cry" but they dont even know that shes right there :)

That's full of emotions! I liked the way you wrote it!.. 5/5

Very good. i like your style of writing and you can find good words to rhyme!

~~Ashley~~