I'm literally speechless, Girl. This was top notch work....you have grown so much as a poet...and I'm not just saying all this. I mean really, that was amazing!!! Like, I just looked back up to see if I could choose a favorite line or even stanza and if I did that then I would just have to paste the whole poem in here! Lol! I wish I could vote higher than a 5!!!
nice poem... i dont really understand the point of the line "Now, what's there left to prove?"... possibly a forced rhyme.. i`m not really sure... but other then that the flow was flawless ... also the descriptions were soo vivid... great job on that !!
Very cute poem.. the flow was great except for this line "But the handle's coming unglued." which seemed a little too long.. i like the whole idea of this poem and that you focused solely on the metaphor of losing your grip rather than trying to fill up lines with pointless words.. an enojoyable read.. keep it up
and i LOVE these lines
"That bar of reason slowly fades
Because all my reasons went wrong."
"I should have let you go then
Now, what's there left to prove? "
Holy shamoley...it`s like you got into my head and wrote out exactly what I feel. As I have said before, that is one thing that really draws me into your poetry, so many people are able to relate to it. You are definately one of my favorite writers. ;]