Comments : Losing Grip

  • 14 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    I'm literally speechless, Girl. This was top notch work....you have grown so much as a poet...and I'm not just saying all this. I mean really, that was amazing!!! Like, I just looked back up to see if I could choose a favorite line or even stanza and if I did that then I would just have to paste the whole poem in here! Lol! I wish I could vote higher than a 5!!!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Sad but beautifully penned. I especially love the opening stanza. Great job! 5/5

  • Wonderful poem. The flow and ryhming cheme was excellent. Good job 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Wow Great Poem!...Im also speechless...It was fantastic

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    Charisma,

    The reason I put you first place for this poem is because of the flow, words and the way you had written this poem. It touched me so much. Congratulations and thanks for entering my contest!

  • 14 years ago

    by Tom K

    Thank you for such a deep emotion... I love feeling your feelings as I read your work. You are very talented. Keep up the good work.. 5/5 for sure!

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    COMMENT # 6

    nice poem... i dont really understand the point of the line "Now, what's there left to prove?"... possibly a forced rhyme.. i`m not really sure... but other then that the flow was flawless ... also the descriptions were soo vivid... great job on that !!

  • 14 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Wow.. i loved this poem.. it was easy to read and flowed very well.. very deep and emotional too.. i love the ending.. great job... keep it up and thanks for the comment =]

  • 14 years ago

    by Genna

    I really loved this poem! It was beautifully sad! And written so well! Keep up the great writing. Thanks for the comment on mine.

  • 14 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Very cute poem.. the flow was great except for this line "But the handle's coming unglued." which seemed a little too long.. i like the whole idea of this poem and that you focused solely on the metaphor of losing your grip rather than trying to fill up lines with pointless words.. an enojoyable read.. keep it up

    :D 5/5

    and i LOVE these lines
    "That bar of reason slowly fades
    Because all my reasons went wrong."

    and

    "I should have let you go then
    Now, what's there left to prove? "

  • 14 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Holy shamoley...it`s like you got into my head and wrote out exactly what I feel. As I have said before, that is one thing that really draws me into your poetry, so many people are able to relate to it. You are definately one of my favorite writers. ;]

    5.5
    :]

  • 14 years ago

    by Thoughtless Consideration

    Absolutely breathtaking! The word choices, the flow, the rhyme scheme...it was completely flawless. You're extremely talented.
    5/5(:

  • 14 years ago

    by Becca

    That was beautifully powerful. I loved this SOOO much. You opened it with words that blew me away and you ended it the same way. Great job, and keep it up! 5/5!

  • 13 years ago

    by natyy

    Wow!beautiful, seriousley, its a lovely poem, even though its sad, i think its just perfect!!!...theres a song by avril lavigne with this title also!!