This is a amazing poem. The story line is great. Word choices excellent.

So don't come near my grave anymore
My anger might pull you into this black parade
Now when I recall our last embrace
I realize how behind my neck you held a blade

What a betryal.You have really done a great job on this write! Take care Your Friend Cindy

Full of pains and sad feelings. i can feel the pain in this poem. such a sad image of lost love. .you realy done gr8 work . this is such a great work. take care. may you live long

You amaze me each time with your poem. You're writings are getting greater and greater by the day. Amazing poem, especially the last stanza. It just blew me away.

Keep it up.
Love
Michelle

Oh.. i felt like i wrote that..
seems like u read my mind..
well.. what can i say.. it's a beautiful piece... love can be so painful sometimes..
i loved every word of this poem..

5.5

Much love,
Ipsita

"So dont you come near my grave anymore
My anger might pull you in this black parade
Now when i recall our last embrace
I realize how behind my neck you held a blade."
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^^ That ending was just AMAZING. This poem was just...wow. I loved it. I thought it was gonna be a sweet lost love poem...but it's just kinda the opposite. Heh. Excellent write. I love it! 5/5!!!

-` Liz

Whoa, that was a great poem... The ending suprised me.. I like it! Fantabulous Job!
Ciao

This Poem was great,
everything was a masterpeice.
-brokenbeauty

Hey, this poem was great so much description. I liked the ending it was wicked teh last line gave the poem that spark!!! Keep it up!!
xoxroxyxox

This was a great poem yet very sad.
Great job. 5/5

This poem of yours was very surprising, and had (in my mind), a turning point at the end! I loved it! Keep writing!

Hey there, good poem! i liked it alot! loved the choice of wordz too!

Very well written....pulls you in at the end....

So dont you come near my grave anymore
My anger might pull you in this black parade
Now when i recall our last embrace
I realize how behind my neck you held a blade

I enjoyed this. Very god imagery and wording. Debbie

This is reallly really deep...i love it..good work..keep it up. :)

Awesome! Great write!

Any my chem. reference in a poem is a 5/5!! great job.

I LIKE IT I LIKE IT ALOT.sweeet and sad.my kind of poems

I like this poem so much I had to read it again...lol.... Really I do... you did a excellent job on this...Well you do a great job on everything your pen touches.....Waiting for you to post a new poem.

Hey i really like how uve written this poem. good job keep em coming. xx

This is pretty sad and dark. Nice job putting betrayal to rhyme!