Sad, i can relate well that was my life like 2 years ago, hang in there :(

So sad but what's the matter with you honey?why are you that sad?hope things work out

O.o why is this under slang.. it doesnt have any slang in it. o.o

i liked this one too. but remember you don't always have to rhyme aabbccdd. or aabb ccdd. try some new techniques! =]

also, some of the lines were too short(ex. the gut line) and it made the poem slgihty choppy. =]

-get this out of slang!-

x.o Lauren

Wow, your such a good writing!
I didn't not like anything in this poem.
The wroding was good and the flow was very nice,
its really very sad! *snifle snifle*
My favs lines where:"But it was to late as the came pouring
And i began soaring"-very nice... 5/5 good job!!

My fav lines where

The ending was awesome. although i dont really understand why you leave out the words blood and wh0re in all your poems, im assuming they are the words anyway. still wicked
much love and many kisses,
bex