Captivation when your near,
`Your = You`re

Gets me like you do?
`Work the syllabication [sp?] It just doesn`t sound right when you read it out loud . Maybe "Gets me the way you do?"

Just to fall into your eyes,
And see a joyful tear,
Or gently raise my hand,
To put the hair behind your ear?,
`I love that . Shows the deep love, with the cute little things that "innocent" couples do but most people hear no mention of [:

Though things maybe beyond us now,
`Seperate the maybe = may be

Yet it gets me more than by,
The precious time that we share,
A minute spent with you,
Is like a gift beyond compare,
`That`s so sweet :) Though I don`t like how you used the word 'by' again when it`s already in use right above it, it works .

I was yours right from the start,
`Maybe re-state that using different words ? It just seems really ... ehh` compared to the rest of the stanza .

I suggest using apostrophes, but other than that, beautiful (:
..__MiNDYY

This is so beautiful! I am actually near tears. I can feel all the emotion that you put into this in each stanza I read. You have a few grammar errors that needs fixing, but other than that I wouldn't change a thing. Great job again on pulling me into your work and leaving me wanting more.

Letty