Comments : Mending this heart

  • 17 years ago

    by icarus

    I liked this piece, I can easily relate. I like the way you wrote it. You can feel what you are saying, understand the conflict, and it almost opens a window to your world. Very enjoyable. My only suggestion would be to change 'So do I' to 'As do I'. I'm not an expert or anything, I just think it would sound better that way.
    Ps thanks for commenting on mine.