I thought ur poem was realy intense and i liked it alot i could realy relate to ur massege that u were sending
GREAT JOB :D

Very nice poem, i can relate 2 this. great job, very well written

Hey, Thanks for your comment first of all! Anywyas about the poem at the bgeining i liked the flow of it, but then by the end you kindof threw me off alittle. I odnt know you had a nice rhyme scheme going and this helped create a good strong rhythem, but by the end the rhythem was just gone... But anyways i liked your words usage and you did draw me in at the begining of the poem. I can relate to it very well and the imagery created was quite grafic. I liked the meaning behind it, if you ever need to talk im hear ok? I owuld rewrite the ending, you can keep the story the same but just change the words or something? No offence intended, im just trying to be honest. Keep writing, you show talent! xx

Very heartfelt poem, im glad you shared it with us...so many of us write about topics that need to be heard...

I love it.. you should read some of mine sometime...
xx amanda xx

I think that is so true and i've got scars too. i feel like this too.we can be broken and beautiful