David! I'm terribly worried about you at the moment. I seriously hope you are okay. This isn't like what i've read of yours before really. I will keep it to the poem on here, it is written very well and shows really strong emotion. The ending worked in really well. Sorry, I'm kind of stunned at the moment. Very good poem though. 5/5

Tammie

Great write. Very emotional piece. I hope all is well. 5/5

marcella

Omg! this poem is really well written!
It's so sad, so much emotion in it.
sry if i havnt commentd ur other poems.. thank you for commenting mine.
ps u rock!
xx

Nice, david. loved 'life or death, the ultimate duel'. very powerful. so tragic! i wish you all good things. this is an excellent poem. 5 for you! -beav

This is a really sad poem. I am glad u didn't do it. i hope you feel better today. This poem has a lot of emotion. and a lot of feeling in it. GREAT POEM 5/5

Kalee

Wow, i hope you're okay, this is so amazing, and i was just kind of stunned by the force of it's emotion,
wow
gabriella

Woah such strong emotion I love it your so great nice job! this poem shows such hurt and it makes me sad so good job!

Wow, that was sooo good! i admire your courage of not going thru with it. its alot harder to live with the pain and suffer than to end your life. chin up

much love and many kisses,
bex

This poem is really well written i was stunned by the force of it's emotion, Very good poem though. 5/5

I love this poem..especially since its so contradicting to the pride poem...which i also loved...i dont know i kind of felt like both of the poems connect rather than contradict each other you know? idk if that was your intent but combined with my personal experience thats what i got...

thank you for your comments also.

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Wow.... *jaw drops to floor* that was such a wonderful poem, which sounds weird because it was extremely sad and emotional. The message behind this poem was heart wrenching. You have such a way of describing things, it's amazing! Flow and everything was superb, as usual, lol. Great write, even better read!! 5/5
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Great poem!
Sad, but a good poem.
I liked the ending.
5/5

I really enjoyed this poem I could definitely feel the emotion... great write.

Though the meaning of this poem is good it still needs a bit of work hun. Read through it again and check for simple mistakes. Even though the mistakes are minor they still take away from great art.

For example:
"I going to be hung
Like a coat hanger on a hook
A few seconds of pain
It is all it would have took"

Would be better if written either I am or I was ...

just a thought babe.

--Sher

I loved the strong emotion this poem gave off. really awesome. (if this poem is really how you felt) then i just hope youre going to be okay..i dont know you but it sounds horrible! dont do anything you cant take back....trust me....i would rather play it safe. and dont be selfish bc im sure you have a bunch of people who love and care about you and to give them a heartache like that...just isnt fair. thats what i think. keep writing i love reading your stuff. ;)

Dont ever go trying that stuff again! talk to someone! but an awsm insight to how you felt at your lowest

Really emtional, and distrubing. I can relate to how you felt in this poem. I have been there more than once. MY favorite part had to be
Yet I let go
It is so evil, so cruel
For some unknown reason
Life or death, the ultimate duel
This staza spoke volumes. Your word choice is excellent, but the flow was a little off in some places, still the message you implied took away from that. again my friend I leave you with 5/5