Great poem, you're an amazing writer.

Hmm quite good. The first couplet came across as just hateful words listed...However the other four couplets were very impressive.
The simple yet creative descriptions provided not only the usual emotion, but it gave a thoughtful meaning too.
The rhyme was not exact, but subtle and similar sounding, so it still sounded good.
Really good, only thing I didn't like was the plain listing in the first couplet.

Short, but wonderful all the same. It had a great flow and a lasting image. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Hey there it is. a comment for you. a comment and a vote of 5 for a poet who has great talent!

5/5 David

I couldnt really understand it. it was ok. but i still couldnt understand what it was about. but that might just be me. good. 4/4

Kalee

Omg this was excellnet nice job!!!

I really liked this. It flowed really well & was short & simple. Had very nice imagery. I liked how you started out.. With all the words, as like.. emotions. Or what you or other people write about.

I'm confusing myself. Lol. BUT. i did really like it. I think you expressed yourself really well & your vocabulary was amazing.

Bri x

Hun r u ok do you need to talk i dont like to hear you so down lordy lord. you hardly ever write sad poems. If you need to talk i am here.

I still think yu`re an ah`mazing writer .
It`s kind of dark, but still well written .
Short, great flow, and emotional .
Just beauutiful [;
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Depression, anger, sadness, fears,
Sick and twisted, hopeless tears.

i so totally loved the start. well done. the words were suited to each other.

5/5 David

I thought the begingingingigng really trapped a reader making me want to read more.
And the shortness made the flow really good.
Well done, I loved it.

x

Great flow, great vocab, great poem...this was short and flowed so well it made the reading so much easier...best wishes. -unattractive1