Comments : Verses of dead time

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    Great job on your poem. It grabs your attention right from the start. Excellent word choices. Take Care Cindy

  • 13 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Your poetry always leaves me thinking. You have wrapped this one up in such heartfelt emotion, that it has left me weeping. Each stanza was so well written that I had a heard time finding a favorite.

    "We have paid the prize of beauty
    and have loosed ourselves in lies
    for the thousand unlit candles
    we have buried in our eyes,"

    This just pulled at my heart. So much depth in these few lines.

    The flow was perfect and the overall message was written with great emotion.

    Very well done, friend.

    Always,
    Jeannie

  • 12 years ago

    by Elapsed

    Wow this piece is awesome!!.. So deep, powerful and profound

    "We have paid the prize of beauty
    and have lost ourselves in lies
    for the thousand unlit candles
    we have buried in our eyes,"

    Found this piece to have a very strong impact, the whole piece was really amazing, though this stanza really hit home for me.. and absolute brilliant write!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Should this:

    ^prize^ be "price"?

    The flow is consistant in this piece. The ending was a suprising twist. Unique and creative. Nice job!