Woah this was great i loved it nice job!

Sadddddd=[ but once again good writing! you are such an amazing writer!

Nice. great use of color. very vivid. i really liked the connection of the color and the emotion. hope that made sense! :) 5 for you! -beav

Dam that is deep and i can feel the pain. friggin awesome writing chica. love sam

Gothic with a sad cliche twist.
The idea behind it was different (good different), but the way you wrote it (language) was no different to all other poems in this category.
Sorry to be so harsh.

I'm not sure how the eyeliner releases pain but it is true that it gets darker with the pain... as if maybe through ones eyes you can see their darkened spirit.

For some reason I can see there being more to this poem... I think if you emphasized on the pain felt and the beauty within that she lost it would add a lot more meaning to the poem. Cause just wearing black make-up and clothes does not not necessarily mean she's not beautiful. Also, maybe try going over it and changing up the vocab. Try a theasuarus. They're great. Overall I think your poem has portrayed a lot of emotion that allows the reader to feel. So for that I will give you 5/5

marcella

I LOVED this.
The first line had he hooked and it just kept getting better and better.
The flow was perfect and the imagery wonderful.
You did an amazing job with this.

You have an amazing talent x

This is a great poem. I loved your imagery!Keep up the good work =]

This was really nice poem the flow was good the message was clear but you did a great job of telling us te case but not so good on why she is like this good poem though. Plot121

This was yet another breathtaking poem. your style is amazing. the flow was perfect. you have an amazing talent.
--TheGothicAlbino

We always look at a person and automatically assume we know why they dress/look the way they do, when the reality is we really have no idea. Excellent job very dark and unique 5/5 GG23

Original poem! o_O I really enjoyed this one.. =]! 5/5 again! and keep up the good work.

I love it!Very, very original and very visual.I could see a girl putting on the whole ''emo'' look, dark black eyeliner, dark lipstick, black attire, and...a frown.Awesome!5/5^_^

<3Amber

The last line made the poem. I mean before it was ok but that last line made it good. Another four for the same reason as before.

She puts on black clothes so people will know,
She's been hurt so now its time to let it show.
She'll go out and people will stare,
Because her beautiful self is no longer there.
beautifully done

it seem you ahve many talents i like this one definatly a vote for you