Meep... i love the love poems you write... i can relate wink wink : )

I really honestly love this.
Each part flows beautifully.

=]
Nicely written indeed.

-blaine
PainOfOne

Very rhythmic poem. Simple and sweet. I liked it!

Overall this is not a bad write, there is some sweet stuff in there, but I would recommend working on your flow, you're syllable count is off in places.

The silence speaks louder
Then words ever could
All I hear is your heart
Beating rhythmically like it should

^I like this stanza the most but the last line is too long, it doesn't flow as nicely as the other 3 do.

With a bit of restructuring this could be great, keep writing.