I think that this poem is of to a good start, but i think that you are trying to put too many emotions into one poem. in my opinion, i think that if you want to write a bood poem then you need to focus on one emotion at a time. if you want to write a second one then do so. for example, go wiht the emothin and the thought about relating this to cinderella and other childhood characters and how being in a good friendship makes you feel that way again. i hope that i helped some... good ideas just a little jumbled.

Erika

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