Aw this poem is so sad. You wrote it beautifully though. 5/5

marcella

I gave it a 4/5 good. *personaly* i like rhymes and flow to peotry.. but i also liked the way you brought it all together.. if it is true.. im sorry about that with your parent and all..

keep writing =]

-linds [[x]]

Awh this is really sad and im sorry if its really true=[..i hope things get better! but you are a really good writer!

Yes, this poems definatly isnt as good as your others, although is stiil good!
I (unfortunatly) can too, relate well with this poem, its wonderfully written, you used very powerful words to express your feelings!
well done 5/5
Steph

I liked the way you brought it all together and how you hook people in the beggining and hold that through the end.great great greatly written and sorry if this is true but you wrote it so well

This poem is one of your better ones. I like the free verse aspect, and the concept that you reveal through the lines. I hate my dad, and i can relate. I especially loved the last line, i wish it wasn't real. A very orignal-like line that i enjoyed. Great job.
5/5
~Stephen White

BEAUTIFUL!... after reading the first line i HAD to finish the poem! beautiful... wording was amazing... right along with teh flow

Well I guess you have to stop wondering why this happens to you? its life, and this is what you have to take it as. Your mum hits you, you are abused, time to do something about it, tell her, confront her, nothing works or happens, run, there is always somewhere else, dont let it be this way anymore, you are older and wiser and you know that this isnt the way life is suppose to be like..

Great feelings, I like the way you try to capture the 'why' factor

I feel for u...
just dont let it get to u
cuz killing ur self is not the answer

I'm really sorry that this is happening to you! You have to over the way your mom treats you. Mabe if you talk to her she'll back off.
I give you the best of luck ,
Rae-Lee

Awe.. this poem is really good.. but sad. yet you wrote it beautifully..