5/5 excellent. i basically been through that. great poem, like your writing. very much to the point. the only line i didnt really like was the last one because everything seemed to have a nice flow until there.

but the rest is chachinging good. haha.

--linds[[x]]

Great poem! I love when I ca really "feel" the emotion along with the writter. And you made that very easy with a great piece. 5/5

marcella

Wow, this is so sad, hope your ok!
It creates a really sad image in my mind, which is both good and bad!
well done, 5/5 from me!
Steph

It creates a really sad image which is good it is very emoitional and vivid i guess is the word. well well well done

At night tears fall from my eyes,
*at night the tears...*

that is just a syllable addition suggeston, make it flow better.

*
I just need to start everything over,
Make a new beginning for me.
Don't let anything like this happen again,
Change the way I did things.
*

that whole stanza is kinda... rough... Iffy, if you know what i mean. it is well written, but i feel it was a little forced.
Good job though.
5/5
~stephen white

This poem is amazing! absolutely... no question about it. i like it because it seems like something ive been through