Comments : Stay With Me (Collab)

  • 12 years ago

    by Cindy

    It was such a pleasure too write this with you Dost...You made it fun...I hope we can do this again in the future. You matched everything I wanted to hear...Excellent job....I was extremly lucky to have had the chance to work with such a talented writer as yourself.

    Your heartbeats are breaths i take
    Your tears just pass my lips by
    Touch your heart to feel my love
    Flow with destiny, never ask why?

    I loved the way you ended this. Thank you for this gift.
    Love your Dost Cindy

  • 12 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Awesome job by you and Cindy! Great transition between the two of you....beautiful and moving... a joy to read.....loved the ending:

    Your heartbeats are breaths i take
    Your tears just pass my lips by
    Touch your heart to feel my love
    Flow with destiny, never ask why?

    Absolutely beautiful! All the best, Debbie 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Princess Love

    This is a remarkable poem. Superbly written. Both of you did an excellent colaboration. Each and every single stanza stands out. Keep it up.

  • 12 years ago

    by Perfect Facade

    This is such a beautifully written, breathtaking poem, not much more to say really 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lithium

    That is a beauitful dedication, we all feel cindy's heartache, wonderful work and i'm sure he is sending his love to her in everyway possible.

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetess

    Exactly what I told Cindy. I truly loved this poem. It was amazing. You both had me crying!! Beautiful write! 5/5!

    -` Liz

  • 12 years ago

    by Mo

    Cindy and End of Eternity - wow - that poem was so beautiful that I sat at my work desk with tears in my eyes. I guess maybe its because the biggest fear I face in my life is loosing my husband at some stage in our lives and me wishing to be with him. It was so beautifully written that, although I still have fear, I hope that when death does separate us temporarily we can still talk like this to each other and know the other one is there for us still. Many thanks for the read. Moira (I've added you both to my favourites as I truly enjoyed this read).

  • 12 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    This was such a beautiful poem. Really very touching.

    You guys truly did an outstanding job on this one.

  • 12 years ago

    by ben thompson

    Very nice and touching write. i know it means the world to cindy. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by dora

    Oh my God. that was soo good. this is one of the best poems ive read this morning. such meaning behind it. a very touching write. u no how to capture a readers heart. very sad write also. good job to the both of u! xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Elapsed

    I'm sorry for your loss. This is a great tribute to someone so special, one to be proud of. Well done to the both of you and best wishes :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Gem

    I just commented on Cindy's with two of my fave poets did a collab! Yay!
    lol
    But seriously, you both did an amazing job on this poem and you should both be so very proud
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Beautifully penned collaboration! The flow was good and the two points of view were as well. Excellent job!