Okay, heh, first of all "gain acclimation" doesn't really make a lot of sense. That's similar to saying "gain adaptation," which sounds silly, doesn't it? Just replace the phrase with "acclimate."

Next,
you misspelled "their" in the 3rd to last line.

Finally,
A bit of opinion. Why is this a poem? I mean, there is no poetic imagery, no metaphor or simile, there is no rhythm or rhyme, nor are there reasons for the line breaks. I'd call it superfluous, but that doesn't quite get my meaning across. I don't mind the topic, it is interesting enough (Shin is a character from a television show called NANA for those that don't know). This poem just lacks nearly everything that makes poems enjoyable, and doesn't make up for it by breaking new ground.

Love ya Kenny. =)

Um...ditto

I disagree with Rex for the following reasons:

1. Haiku are elegant because of their restrictions. Due to the strict and limited number of syllables, the BEST WORDS to construe a certain meaning are used. That was not the case here.

2. There wasn't a 9-3-9-3 etc. pattern here.

3. Creativity alone doesn't spawn good poetry. Maybe creativity and genius, or creativity and hard work, or creativity and discipline. I can creatively use drool to spell my name in the dirt, it doesn't make it artistically mentionable.

No offense taken =).

I think discussion is important and often left out.

Hmmm... I don't really understand this poem, but perhaps you could explain it to me more. You don't have to, only if you want to. Either in comment on this poem or a PM, either is good :D.
I look forward to reading other poems by you in the future :D.

With all due respect,
Hatori
The Illusionist

Wow, greatly written dark poem, with excellently created atmosphere in it. I like it from the beginning to the end, but my favorite stanza is:

-I don't recall when I became a
hollow shell
People would keep taking parts of my
heart and soul.
No one tried giving anything back.-

Very powerful piece, so effective.
5/5 from me

Regardless of all the above comments, I thought this piece was wonderful. It seemed very sad, and it was like a window into a larger story. the poem was set in the present, but leaft questions about the past.
I really liked it!

Shin = death?
Superb poem, ambiguous but very...pretty~¿
I can't think of a more fitting adjective for it, it's very pretty, albeit in a morbid sort of sense.
5/5, great job!