Sorry, wasn't keen. It was following the suicide theme (and you know what I think of that). Yet, this one had forced rhyme.
For future reference I think you should keep away from rhyme, as your free verse is stronger. Also, try some new ideas, rather than killing yourself. I've read it too much to appreciate it.
Short to the point write. I liked the rhyme and the flow of the poem. Well written for such a short write, at first I was skeptical that it was going to be too short, but you ended this very nicely not leaving it up in the air like many short poems. Nice write!
I think this poem would be better if the first 3 stanzas hadn't suggested perfect rhyming. It was hard to find the flow after that. Maybe this is exactly what you wanted...in which case you shouldn't take into consideration what I've said. Though I really do appreciate the content and message. I think it's a very beautiful piece, short and to the point. I enjoyed this. Nice job.