Wow...this is brilliant! i love it!..expressive..and powerful...fantastic!

Very powerful and intense poem, nice use of imagery and good vocabulary.
I personally prefer poems with rhyme schemes, although this works without one.

Hmm, the capitalized h in "He" implies God, I guess that's what you were trying to point out in this piece. If it is, you did a very nice job of implies Him without actually saying it.

Overall a very nice piece to read, flows nicely right from the start.

Keep it up.
~Pete.

Very expressive, Great job
Nice choice of wording used in most parts of the poem aswell =]